Context: I wasn’t happy with how this was originally written. Hawkes is very much an internally-focused character, so I’m having trouble not so much wrapping my head around him as I am trying to make him interesting to the reader.
Hawkes watched as Devereux silently stared at the main bridge displays. As Tactical Officer, his responsibilities on this mission had originally encompassed ensuring that the additional security arrangements requested by Colonel Antonio were in place. There had been little expectation that the ship’s weapons or defensive system would be needed during their brief test flight. Once that was done, there had been little for him to do but continue to monitor what had quickly become routine reports between the security posts. Not that he particularly minded. Routine was good, he had along ago concluded. It tended to prevent the unexpected. In space, unforeseen events usually resulted in disaster, often for both the vessel and its crew.
Fortunately, what had happened was not entirely unexpected. A failure of the prototype drive system had been discussed as one of the most likely outcomes of the test. However, based on success of the simulations in both the lab and smaller test vessels, it had been considered to have a low probability. Given that, Hawkes suspected was that no one had anticipated that it might fail in quite so dramatic a fashion.
Based on the status reports he had received so far, it appeared that they were fortunate. Other for the two casualties already reported by the ship’s physician, there appeared to be no other significant injuries among the crew. So far, reports from all other sections except for the main Engineering deck seemed to indicate no significant damage to the ship—although it was still unclear what had caused the injuries to the two affected crew members. Hawkes held little doubt that Hope’s report would be prompt and thorough.
“Captain,” Hawkes called out, his voice rising just slightly above its usual even timbre. “All reports so far indicate no significant damage to the ship, or its systems, outside of Engineering.”
“Thank you, Lieutenant,” Devereux acknowledged, almost absently it seemed to Hawkes. Her gaze remained intent on the view displayed on the main screens. After waiting for a moment to see whether she would respond further, he turned his attention back to the updated status data that flashed onto the displays at his station. He officially logged his report and began studying the new reports.